Childhood's End

The Toymaker Assassination Saga

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15th Nov 2018, 9:33 PM
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lirvilas 15th Nov 2018, 9:33 PM
lirvilas
Tried this one with sound effects, was unhappy with the effect.

Here's the link, tell me what you think.

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Yeah, this streak is gonna end, not sure when.
Microraptor 16th Nov 2018, 8:31 AM
Microraptor
Regarding the sound effects:

First up, none of both options makes me immediately go: "Yeah, this is obviously the much better/worse version!"
Each version works in principle.

That being said though...

- With the sound effects, it reminds me perhaps a bit too much of the 60s Batman series.
But that may be because you told us to pay attention to them in the first place. The old "don't think about pink rhinos - ha, made you think about pink rhinos" effect.

- Without the sound effects, the empty space in panel two seems a bit odd perhaps. (But here again: Pink rhino effect.)
Furthermore, it is less clear that Wildebees is already landing a hit in panel one. At the first glance could be interpreted as her running towards her opponent instead. (I think the problem causing this is actually the "streaky" background, though. Maybe the center the streaks are coming from should rather be where her fist is?)
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Regarding the comic proper:

Yeah, three hits in one swoop! And each one with another limb, with the fourth one as the pivot!

Comments:

ProfEtheric 16th Nov 2018, 1:53 AM
ProfEtheric
Better without sound effects, sir.

And Wendell is definitely gonna feel that one tomorrow.

Of course, knowing your works like I do, I have to wonder when the other shoe is gonna drop...
Microraptor 16th Nov 2018, 8:44 AM
Microraptor
"And Wendell is definitely gonna feel that one tomorrow."

His purse will feel that too because he needs to buy new glasses now. :-D
anonymous coward 16th Nov 2018, 2:10 AM
I like the minimalism of the wordless version more. I think you just showed that the written onomatopoeia thing that comics do during fight scenes is often too silly to match the grim and serious palette, mood and plot you're working with in this creation.

P.S. If the backup goons Wendell brought are worth anything this might be as far as Wildebees gets kicking ass today. Anybody wanna bet five Quatloos against me on that?
Microraptor 16th Nov 2018, 8:49 AM
Microraptor
The first round goes to Wildebees - but yeah, this is quite certainly just the first round yet...
Call me Tom 16th Nov 2018, 8:27 AM
Awesome page!
lirvilas 16th Nov 2018, 8:36 AM
lirvilas
Thanks!
sigpig 16th Nov 2018, 1:39 PM
sigpig
Wendel's going to be eating through a straw while his jaw is wired shut...
Microraptor 16th Nov 2018, 2:25 PM
Microraptor
Which means that at least he won't talk any crap anymore for a while!
lirvilas 16th Nov 2018, 3:20 PM
lirvilas
Jaws getting wired shut may factor into the next project...
AmeliaP 17th Dec 2018, 6:33 PM
AmeliaP
Woo, 2nd panel is great!
Microraptor 17th Dec 2018, 7:16 PM
Microraptor
Wendell getting punched in the face is always great! ;-D
lirvilas 17th Dec 2018, 7:39 PM
lirvilas
To echo Anon Coward, I seriously screwed up my rendition of Wendell in that panel; it's not patently clear that it's him.

Anyway, I appreciate your enthusiasm for face-punching!
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